Punctuation does get better on following chapters (though I must admit I've read so much that I think I begun to ignore it a bit... which is bad)

Why I liked it... because the author (despite the flaws) makes a great job to blend the two universes in a belivable way. The author also manages to portray each individual personality on spot (even on those manga/novel only characters).

The best characterization, by far, is Kyon. The author manages to write in the very same style the novels are written. With Kyon's input at almost everything with his usual sarcasm. And it never fails to characterize the other characters either. Format changes accordingly when Kyon isn't present as well.

Meh... another reason for me to not link my own stories. While I've gotten better... I do cringe sometimes with how I wrote at the start.